Me Easttle writing test about Disneyland

This is where my Disneyland trip begins. As I walked in I saw a huge castle. Some very wonderful people welcomed us in and asked if we wanted to go on the rides or see the disney characters. My brother said Disney characters so that’s where we went. Where as I walked in I saw a huge castle.  We entered in the castle and the first people we saw was Tinkerbell and her friends. We took pictures with all of them and also got their autographs.

The next people we saw was Mickey Mouse and his crew. I think we took the most pictures with them. After we took pictures with everybody else and we then went to the Disney parade. Before that me and my brother got some cotton candy. It was so delicious.

When we went to the Disney parade we saw lots of people from all sorts of movies like Toy story,Cinderella, The little mermaid and lots of princesses. At the end of the day I thought how lucky I was to be in Disneyland.

Candyland

Candy Land

“Oh my god i’m lost... wait a sec is this Candyland?” I said to myself. 
“Yes this is Candyland” whispered a Giant
Cookie.
”Why are you whispering?” I said in a loud voice.
“Because the queen and king chocolate bars are sleeping and so is their daughter." The grass was made of delicious green sour patch kids.

"I secretly ate some of the Giant Cookie’s cupcake house." In the distance I could smell tasty peanut butter biscuits. The marshmallow were as soft as a fluffy pillow.

My beach art

My diorama

WALT:Write a prediction for what a story might be about based on the given keywords

There were two girls named Lili and Ana. lili liked delivering circulars and Ana was always in the  buggy. Today  they took off in a hurry, they were running around the streets like mad until they reached a particular house, they knew they would get paid here. Then Lili put the buggy’s brakes on.  “Sorry girls, I got sick, lost my job and it's bad, I’m really sorry but I can't pay you today.”the man at the door cried

“No worries and I am very sorry you lost your job and got sick.” Lili said solemnly.

WALT: Evaluate our prediction after reading the story (Junkmail by Prue Hilson, Pt3, No.3, 1995)

I give my prediction a 1/10. I predicted correctly that people deliver circulars however I predicted that two girls went up to a man's house and he said that he got sick and lost his job that part was wrong.

Where am I describing?

Where am I describing?

It is awake 24/7.

You can shop here.

You put your bags on a conveyor belt.

I see a sign in capital letters that says WHITTAKERS..

An elevator takes me up to my destination.

“Bye” people say sorrowfully, as they leave.

The doors open and you wait for an hour to board your vehicle.

There are lots of places to eat before you go.

The crew help you  get ready to board.

There is a long line till you hop onto your mode of transportation.

Where am I describing?