Tuesday 11 June 2019

Driver's + cellphones persuasive writing

In my opinion, I think that an adult who is driving should not have a phone in their hand.
One of my reasons is because it could cause serious injuries to others drivers who are looking straight ahead on the road and another one of my reasons is if you are looking at your phone even for a split second you could knock over little kids and their parents who are crossing the road.
Another one of my reasons is if you keep on looking at your phone then you might not know when the street light turns red and keep on going then that could generate an enormous accident with two cars colliding.
So I hope all these reasons have persuaded you that cell phones in the driver's hand should be banned. (Bluetooth is legal so that’s OK).

I Garuth have read your writing and I like the way you used good vocabulary and also elaborate more. Other than that it, is all good.